new to Konoha-Gakure

Hi!
so, this is going to be my first kappi! ^^ I hope you write me a couple of commis ... I'm trying to write well! ^^
well, let's go !!! ^^
your haku

It was a warm spring morning. The sun shone gently on the land and the wind refreshed the earth with its breeze. The birds flew around and chirped happily.
A sudden crack and a startled hare interrupted this idyll. An arrow raced towards the hare and pierced it.
At the same time a girl of about 14 years of age passed the gates of Konoha-Gakures. Her black hair fell heavily on her back. She headed for the great market street. It was overflowing with people who scurried around like a plague, going to every stall and shop and coming out with full shopping bags.
The girl watched it all with a bored look. Sellers offered all kinds of prices: jewelry of all kinds, fruit and vegetables, cloth and clothes, and even weapons.Everything was there. She passed a fish stall. Empty eyes looked at her and a queasy feeling spread in her stomach. She hurried on.
Suddenly she was jostled. A little annoyed, she looked around and saw a pink-haired girl. "Oh, gomen!" Said an unnaturally high voice to her. "Hm ... It's okay.", She muttered in response and wanted to go on. "Wait a minute! I'm Sakura!" "Great." She wanted to go on, had nothing to do with this girl. “Well, listen!” She said indignantly, “You're new! I thought I could show you the village!” “Yes, yes, later ...” exasperated, the new girl turned around and left. "Ok! I'll pick you up later!" ° Oh man, I hope not everyone here has such a sunny, exuberant disposition! °, thought the black-haired one and then turned back to the street. She saw the large main house from afar and headed for it.
The guards eyed her, you didn't see a ninja from Oto-Gakure too often.“What do you want?” “I want to see the Hokage.” “Why?” The guards still eyed her suspiciously. "Is it forbidden to talk to the Hokage?" Replied the girl, bored. Those guards were really bad. Reluctantly, they let her pass. Inside, she still had to answer a few questions. By the time she was finally allowed to go to the Hokage, her nerves were already a bit strained.
She knocked. "Come in!" It came from the room. She went in and found herself in a large room with a couple of windows letting light in. There were no pictures or other decorations. Behind a desk with some papers sat a small man who appeared to be the Hokage. She bowed slightly and took a seat in a chair at the man's gesture.
"So. What is your concern?" "I ask for a place to live, since my family is no longer alive." "Hmm ... so you are a ninja from Oto-Gakure?" around her hald. After that was the carving of their home village. "Yes." "What's your name? "" I'm Kurumi Orochi. "" What is your rank? "" I'm a chunin. "She rummaged through her kimono and took out a piece of paper that Sensei had given her. The Hokage scanned the note and gave it back to her." Good. I found a room with a girl. Her name is Sakura Haruno. "Kurumi grimaced slightly at the name." The Nara family also has a room available. "The girl decided on the second offer. The Hokage told her that the Naras' son, Shikamaru, was also a Chunin and they would probably work together. He then gave her a key for the apartment and a map of Konoha -Gakure, which circled the Naras house, after which Kurumi politely said goodbye and went out again.
She took a deep breath. "Ah ...!" ° I think I have to go to the market again. I still need new things. ° The thought of so many people left? they shiver easily. So she decided to go to the Nara family first and then go shopping.She walked leisurely on her way, studying her surroundings carefully, paying attention to almost every little thing, listening to the noises.
When she stood in front of the house where she was supposed to live, she knocked lightly. It was a relatively large wooden house. A woman's voice could be heard from inside. "SHIKAA !!! OPEN UP !!!" Steps followed and after a few seconds the door was opened. "Yes?" Asked a rather annoyed boy, around 15 with black hair, and looked at Kurumi. "Hello. I'm supposed to live here.", Kurumi replied, bored. The boy grimaced at the thought of having a girl living in this house. But then the saving idea came to him. “And who said that?” “The Hokage.” Now the woman was also seen. "Oh, hello! You have to be Kurumi. The hokage has already notified me!", The woman beamed at her. Shikamaru moved to the side so that Kurumi could enter. "This is Shikamaru and I'm his mother. My husband is currently on a mission. Shikamaru will show you the house, I'll quickly make your bed.There is food at 8, so please be there on time! "Kurumi needed something after she had processed the torrent of speech, then cam and followed the boy. He showed her everything. Her room was on the first floor, next to the bathroom.
After the tour of the house, Kurumi went to Marktstrasse. This was now less full and you could do your shopping in a relaxed manner. The black-haired girl bought a mesh shirt, tight, black 3/4 pants and a white, wide shirt. Then she bought new ninja shoes. After everything was done, she looked around for a thank you for the nara. She discovered a flower shop and bought a bouquet of red and yellow flowers. ° Was that exhausting. Always those salespeople who want to talk you into everything! °, thought Kurumi and looked around for a meadow. So she strolled through the village and finally found one too. She lay down and looked up at the clouds. ° What a quiet! °
Kurumi lay there for a long time and studied the clouds as if they were something incredibly exciting and didn't notice someone sitting next to her.A few minutes passed before this someone spoke to her.
"Cloud!"
Startled, the black-haired woman jumped up and looked around frantically. ° What? ° Then she saw Sakura, who had sat down next to her and was looking at her with an exaggerated grin.
“What?” Kurumi really didn't have a nerve on this girl. “Your name is Cloud now!” She giggled. ° Oh my god! ° Kurumi thought her eardrums would tear, her voice was so piercing. She grimaced a little and said, "What do you want?" Sakura looked at Kurumi in amazement. "I told you that I would pick you up and then show you the city!" ° Oh no! I've completely forgotten that! °, Kurumi whined in thought. "Um, well, you know ...", she started, but she already noticed that the person opposite was not really listening to her. She followed Sakura's gaze and landed on a boy with white hair and eyes. "Huh?" Kurumi said. Abruptly, the girl turned back to her and looked at her questioningly. "Uh ... sorry, my mind was elsewhere!"And again she grinned at her so playfully. But Kurumi had already thought about how she would get rid of this nerve plague." You like him, don't you? "Sakura blushed." How-why do you ask? "° Now I have you! °, the dark-haired woman thought triumphantly and said:" I saw your look. And I saw that he was just looking at you so in love. "Now Sakura got big eyes." Really ?? " "Why should I lie? If I were you, I would go after him quickly, he looked like he was about to tell you something important. "I winked at her uz." Ok! I will! Thanks!! "And the problem was off on two legs. Relieved, she closed her eyes and nodded shortly afterwards.

It was already getting dark when she woke up. Kurumi checked her watch. "Oh ... I should hurry ..." She got up quickly, took her things and started walking back. She looked at the sky. ° Nice ... °, she thought, ° how the sun dips the clouds in reddish colors ... °When Kurumi arrived, a pleasant smell rose in his nose. She went to her room and put her things in a box. Then she went down with the flowers to eat. The mother accepted the flowers with thanks and put them in a vase. After a while Shikamaru came and they all started to eat.
Kurumi helped with the washing up and then went to bed. There she lay awake for a long time and thought about her plan, but came to the decision to go through with it. ° Why do I doubt? I've done something like this before. Well, this time it's a bigger action ... But basically it's the same. ° She pondered it for a long time and then fell asleep at some point.

so, I hope it's not too boring and you write me a couple of commis! ^^
your haku