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Fanfic: Dragonball DR (Drachen Ritt)
Chapter: Dragonball DR (dragon ride)
This is my first FF, please take it into account, I will continue to tell my story if the comments are good. It plays right after Dragonball GT. It should contain at least 20 chapters.
1 a new universe
Son-Goku is still asleep on Shenlong's back. When he wakes up after hours of restful sleep, he can still see the yellow clouds below him that he had already seen while walking along the snake path. You were in the realm of the dead. Son-Goku asked Shenlong where it was going, but he didn't answer. Suddenly Goku said: "Hey, Shenlong! I'm really hungry, I can eat a bunch of dinosaurs. There's nowhere to eat?" After 18 hours of a rather fast flight, Shenlong said: "Take a rest, Son-Goku, you will need all your strength for this test!" Goku wondered what Shenlong meant but lay down and slept.
During this time, Son Goku's friends had gathered in God's palace near Dende. "Isn't there any way to reactivate the Dragon Balls?" Kuririn asked. “No, Kuririn!” Replied Dende, the god of the earth. "Hey, Dende, think about how to fix that!" Vegeta said in a bad mood, knowing that Goku would never return. "Yeah, I think so!". There was a pause. After a few seconds, Dende had this saving idea: "I could create new dragon balls!" "Yes, exactly! That is the solution." The people around said and Dende immediately set to work to create new dragon balls.
Goku was conjured up by the dragon with the words "Get up! It's time!" awakened.
"What do you think?" asked Goku. "Your exam begins!" "What kind of exam?" "You will compete against your dark self! You remember your fall, when all evil fell away from you?" "Yes, I was told. But. ..?"" It materialized into a body that looks very much like yours. He was banished to this planet of dark souls. "Only now did Son-Goku notice the giant black planets in front of them." You will have to compete against your dark side, only if you win you can go on, but if you lose you stay here forever! " "What? Stay here forever? " "Exactly! And now go Goku, I'll wait here! "Goku set out reluctantly and at the same time curious how strong his opponent would be. When he landed on the planet, he heard a voice that sounded like his own and yet had a dark undertone." I've lived here since we separated , I train hard to be ready for our fight. "Goku went on, he had the feeling that the landscape around him was slowly turning color and taking on the shape of the tournament ground at the great martial arts tournament. Again he heard the voice:" Come Goku, come into the arena to fight with me!"Goku came into the arena and saw ... himself standing in the ring!" Let's fight! "Said the dark Goku! Both transformed into Super Sayajin Level 4 and the fight began at full power!
You could hardly tell them apart, but the fight was over after a short time.
Son-Goku had sent C-Goku out of the ring with a punch combination. "That doesn't count, you have the power of the dragon balls in you!" "That doesn't matter! He passed the test, now to the 2nd opponent!" "What? That wasn't the right opponent yet?" "No, and now go on ! ". Now a warrior stepped out of the shadows, he looked exactly like Goku again, but he was much stronger. “Let the fight begin!” Goku attacked, he kept hitting exactly where he wanted to hit, but that didn't seem to impress his opponent. So Goku shouted: "50 times Kaioken!" His power increased suddenly and his opponent could not dodge in time and got the full power of the blow!He flew to the end of the ring and was only able to catch himself there. “You can do more than I thought, Goku!” He laughed. Son Goku attacked again and an exciting fight began. Dark-Goku parried every blow from Son-Goku and finally countered with a Kamme-Hamme-Ha. Goku was surprised but he knew an effective counterattack. "Reflector!", A bluish shield built up in front of him, caught the Kamme-Hamme-Ha, and threw it back. Dark-Goku could only just avoid it. Son-Goku took advantage of his surprise and knocked him out of the ring with a 50-fold Kaioken. "Your techniques and your strength is impressive and now come to me Kakkarott. I'm your real opponent." "Good, I'll come to you! But where can I find you?" "Keep going straight until you meet me." The landscape dissolved again and trees and grass formed out. Goku went on until he met a man who had blue hair, with the hairstyle like a Super Sayajin level 3. He had a combat suit like Goku, but his was black with a dark blue t-shirt, and a black one, Silver glittering belt."Fight cocktails!". Son-Goku attacked the stranger, but he quickly realized that he had underestimated him. The blue-haired Super Sayajin said: "You have no chance of Kakkarott. I have reached the Super Sayajin level 5. Even the Dragon Balls don't give you enough power to defeat me. If you are interested, my combat strength is now over 190,000,000,000." “Who are you?” Asked Goku. "I am you, you are me, we are one and yet again we are not.", Gokus replied, "like Piccolo and God, but I cannot become good and we cannot merge again. Besides, one can die without him each other dies too. "The blue-haired Sayajin began to beat Goku wildly until he passed out on the floor. "Train hard until I will be forced to return here in 10 years. Because if I defeat you again, I will be forever free and the universe will be mine. Because even the strongest warriors cannot harm me."Hahahahaha ... "...! Son-Goku woke up and first saw the dragon Shenlong. He said to him:" You heard him train for the next ten years in this universe. There are many tough opponents here, but you should first visit the Dai Kaioshin of this universe. He is stronger than you and a very good teacher. Rise! "Son-Goku obeyed. After a day of rest for Goku, they arrived in the Kaiosphere. The Dai Kaioshin and the Five Kaioshins of this universe were already waiting for him. The youngest Kaioshin began to speak:" Be welcome Son-Goku, legendary Sayajin from another universe. I am the representative of the Dai Kaioshin. I will take over your training, but first you will show your strength by fighting the other four Kaioshins. " "OK! ". The four Kaioshins attacked Goku from all four sides. Suddenly Goku noticed that he lacked some strength." The Dragon Balls ... ??? "" They were taken from your body and turned into Seven Creatures of Evil, you must defeat them all and reclaim the Dragon Balls.We'll train you for the next 7 years, then we'll put you through an exam. After that you will train yourself for 1 year and then look for the 7 Dragon Balls. Only then will you come back to us.
But never forget, your opponent is getting stronger and you will have to train even harder. Now begins. "Goku turned back to Super Sayajin Level 4 and used the 100-fold Kaioken, with which he easily defeated the first 3 Kaioshins, but the fourth was a lot stronger. Son-Goku fought hard, suddenly the Kaioshin went to the comb -Hamme-Ha an and Son-Goku replied. The energy beams met in a huge ball. Son-Goku narrowly won. "Let the training begin," said the Dai Kaioshin, the ruler of this universe.
Sequel follows...
Please write a few comments on how I could improve the story.
1 a new universe
Son-Goku is still asleep on Shenlong's back. When he wakes up after hours of restful sleep, he can still see the yellow clouds below him that he had already seen while walking along the snake path. You were in the realm of the dead. Son-Goku asked Shenlong where it was going, but he didn't answer. Suddenly Goku said: "Hey, Shenlong! I'm really hungry, I can eat a bunch of dinosaurs. There's nowhere to eat?" After 18 hours of a rather fast flight, Shenlong said: "Take a rest, Son-Goku, you will need all your strength for this test!" Goku wondered what Shenlong meant but lay down and slept.
During this time, Son Goku's friends had gathered in God's palace near Dende. "Isn't there any way to reactivate the Dragon Balls?" Kuririn asked. “No, Kuririn!” Replied Dende, the god of the earth. "Hey, Dende, think about how to fix that!" Vegeta said in a bad mood, knowing that Goku would never return. "Yeah, I think so!". There was a pause. After a few seconds, Dende had this saving idea: "I could create new dragon balls!" "Yes, exactly! That is the solution." The people around said and Dende immediately set to work to create new dragon balls.
Goku was conjured up by the dragon with the words "Get up! It's time!" awakened.
"What do you think?" asked Goku. "Your exam begins!" "What kind of exam?" "You will compete against your dark self! You remember your fall, when all evil fell away from you?" "Yes, I was told. But. ..?"" It materialized into a body that looks very much like yours. He was banished to this planet of dark souls. "Only now did Son-Goku notice the giant black planets in front of them." You will have to compete against your dark side, only if you win you can go on, but if you lose you stay here forever! " "What? Stay here forever? " "Exactly! And now go Goku, I'll wait here! "Goku set out reluctantly and at the same time curious how strong his opponent would be. When he landed on the planet, he heard a voice that sounded like his own and yet had a dark undertone." I've lived here since we separated , I train hard to be ready for our fight. "Goku went on, he had the feeling that the landscape around him was slowly turning color and taking on the shape of the tournament ground at the great martial arts tournament. Again he heard the voice:" Come Goku, come into the arena to fight with me!"Goku came into the arena and saw ... himself standing in the ring!" Let's fight! "Said the dark Goku! Both transformed into Super Sayajin Level 4 and the fight began at full power!
You could hardly tell them apart, but the fight was over after a short time.
Son-Goku had sent C-Goku out of the ring with a punch combination. "That doesn't count, you have the power of the dragon balls in you!" "That doesn't matter! He passed the test, now to the 2nd opponent!" "What? That wasn't the right opponent yet?" "No, and now go on ! ". Now a warrior stepped out of the shadows, he looked exactly like Goku again, but he was much stronger. “Let the fight begin!” Goku attacked, he kept hitting exactly where he wanted to hit, but that didn't seem to impress his opponent. So Goku shouted: "50 times Kaioken!" His power increased suddenly and his opponent could not dodge in time and got the full power of the blow!He flew to the end of the ring and was only able to catch himself there. “You can do more than I thought, Goku!” He laughed. Son Goku attacked again and an exciting fight began. Dark-Goku parried every blow from Son-Goku and finally countered with a Kamme-Hamme-Ha. Goku was surprised but he knew an effective counterattack. "Reflector!", A bluish shield built up in front of him, caught the Kamme-Hamme-Ha, and threw it back. Dark-Goku could only just avoid it. Son-Goku took advantage of his surprise and knocked him out of the ring with a 50-fold Kaioken. "Your techniques and your strength is impressive and now come to me Kakkarott. I'm your real opponent." "Good, I'll come to you! But where can I find you?" "Keep going straight until you meet me." The landscape dissolved again and trees and grass formed out. Goku went on until he met a man who had blue hair, with the hairstyle like a Super Sayajin level 3. He had a combat suit like Goku, but his was black with a dark blue t-shirt, and a black one, Silver glittering belt."Fight cocktails!". Son-Goku attacked the stranger, but he quickly realized that he had underestimated him. The blue-haired Super Sayajin said: "You have no chance of Kakkarott. I have reached the Super Sayajin level 5. Even the Dragon Balls don't give you enough power to defeat me. If you are interested, my combat strength is now over 190,000,000,000." “Who are you?” Asked Goku. "I am you, you are me, we are one and yet again we are not.", Gokus replied, "like Piccolo and God, but I cannot become good and we cannot merge again. Besides, one can die without him each other dies too. "The blue-haired Sayajin began to beat Goku wildly until he passed out on the floor. "Train hard until I will be forced to return here in 10 years. Because if I defeat you again, I will be forever free and the universe will be mine. Because even the strongest warriors cannot harm me."Hahahahaha ... "...! Son-Goku woke up and first saw the dragon Shenlong. He said to him:" You heard him train for the next ten years in this universe. There are many tough opponents here, but you should first visit the Dai Kaioshin of this universe. He is stronger than you and a very good teacher. Rise! "Son-Goku obeyed. After a day of rest for Goku, they arrived in the Kaiosphere. The Dai Kaioshin and the Five Kaioshins of this universe were already waiting for him. The youngest Kaioshin began to speak:" Be welcome Son-Goku, legendary Sayajin from another universe. I am the representative of the Dai Kaioshin. I will take over your training, but first you will show your strength by fighting the other four Kaioshins. " "OK! ". The four Kaioshins attacked Goku from all four sides. Suddenly Goku noticed that he lacked some strength." The Dragon Balls ... ??? "" They were taken from your body and turned into Seven Creatures of Evil, you must defeat them all and reclaim the Dragon Balls.We'll train you for the next 7 years, then we'll put you through an exam. After that you will train yourself for 1 year and then look for the 7 Dragon Balls. Only then will you come back to us.
But never forget, your opponent is getting stronger and you will have to train even harder. Now begins. "Goku turned back to Super Sayajin Level 4 and used the 100-fold Kaioken, with which he easily defeated the first 3 Kaioshins, but the fourth was a lot stronger. Son-Goku fought hard, suddenly the Kaioshin went to the comb -Hamme-Ha an and Son-Goku replied. The energy beams met in a huge ball. Son-Goku narrowly won. "Let the training begin," said the Dai Kaioshin, the ruler of this universe.
Sequel follows...
Please write a few comments on how I could improve the story.