was heard as the bones of his skull gave way to the wall and burst.In a macabre rain of his own blood fell back to the ground and before he even hit the bottom, life had left him. Dead empty eyes stared reproachfully at Chaska. Without emotion, the wizard turned away and slipped under the wall.

Sooo I've pimped up the original first chapter and I'm actually very happy with it. Of course I would like to know from you now how you feel about the whole thing. Positive as well as negative comments are always welcome, after all I want to get better!
As soon as I make it, the second chapter will be polished up ^^
I hope it was exciting!
hug you all
umi-chan ^. ^ v