As I said, this is my first story, so please don't be too strict. But I would be happy about commis and tips.
Have fun kizzz devilsdaughter

Black. A black of such rare intensity surrounded her. She was unable to move. She tried to straighten up, but only a burning pain went through her. Suddenly she heard soft voices. They seemed to be forever far away, and yet Lena could clearly make out her name, which kept coming up. She tried to catch at least a few bits of conversation. She wants to open her eyes. See! She wanted to see something! She activated her last reserves of strength, straightened up and opened her eyes. Black ... one more time ... open your eyes! Just black again ...
But now she could at least hear what the voices were saying around her. A deep voice spoke soothingly to a crying boy. The chief doctor said that she had lost her eyesight. In the early morning accident.
He described in detail how the car rolled over four times, only to be hit by a truck. He tried to comfort the boy, whom Lena recognized as her friend Phil, by showing him what else could have happened. Lena got sick when she imagined this. "Blind, well!", She thought, but must have said this thought out loud.
Suddenly she heard a familiar voice. "Lena, sweetheart! You're awake! What luck," she heard her friend's voice. "I, ... you, ... we, ..." he stammered in a soft voice. There was an awkward silence. How can you explain to someone that he will never see again!
A tear fell from the corner of her eye. Phil gently stroked her cheek. "I'm blind, aren't I? I'll never see again." she whispered almost inaudibly, and yet Phil understood her.
Then they heard the voice of the chief physician, who until now just stood with them indifferently."Well, there would be a way to be able to see again. We just need your approval. But are you aware of the risk that you could die in the process!"
Without hesitation, ignoring her friend's wheezing, she agreed.
"You, ... why are you doing this?" She heard Phil's voice. "You could die! What should I do then?" She understood him, but she couldn't bear to look into his face. Not being able to look into the faces of their friends. Not being able to perceive the flowers and trees around them.
"You ask me why. It's easy! Because I love you!"
This sentence hit him right in the heart.
"I want to risk it! For us!"
She was brought to him for surgery and then….
Black. A black that suffocates and embraces everything. And suddenly in the far distance ...
A light…