Chapter: Atlantis

Yes, I still exist.

Here is a new chapter:

Atlantis

Atemi is now 39 years old and is on her way back from her trip to Europe. Today she wants to look at Atlantis and Mahado sinks into lovesickness.

At Atemi:

Atemi: That's nice here.
Dartz: You would be right there.
Atemi: Who are you?
Dartz: I am Dartz and the king of the country. You are the Atemi Queen of Egypt, aren't you?
Atemi: Exactly.
Dartz: May I ask what you want here?
Atemi: Of course it is. I'm on a return trip from my trip to Europe and I wanted to see Atlantis at the end.
Dartz: What an honor. May I show you around?
Atemi: Okay. On horseback or on foot?
Dartz: Since you are on horseback and I am too, I would say we will stay that way.

She agrees and after a long ride they arrive at the Palace of Dartz.

Dartz: This is my palace.
Atemi: It looks nice. But I have to go now.
Dartz: Do you want or do you have to?Atemi: Both. I long for my sweetheart.
Dartz: Oh really? What if I don't allow you?
Atemi: Yeah really. If you don't let me, I'll be brutal. Even if it's not my level. Now if you would excuse me.

She rides off, but is cut off by 5 guards. She wants to go back, but is stopped there by 5 guards.

1st guard: You come with me.

They ride to the palace and Atemi is pulled by Moonlight and brought into a room.

Atemi: What do you actually want? What about my horse And if you just curl her hair or cover her, there's a treat, I promise.
1st guard: What do we want? Rather, what does Dartz want ?! He wants you to be a wife! As for your horse, don't worry, we won't do anything to her.
Atemi: Not even riding! Tell your dartz that I am utterly averse.
2nd Guard: Be sure we will.

The two guards leave and a woman comes. Atemi sits down, leans against the wall and closes his eyes.Woman: Who are you and where are you from?

Atemi opens his eyes.

Atemi: I am Atemi and ruler of Egypt. Who are you?
Woman: I'm Jenny and I'm actually from England. I was on vacation here. How did you get here?
Atemi: So on a trip to Europe I was a different country every day. At the end I wanted to look at Atlantis, which I managed to do.
Jenny: Do you already have a husband?
Atemi: Yep.

They talk all night.

The next morning in Egypt:

Mahado: So Atemu, you will take over the position for a moment.
Atemu: Why then?
Mahado: I'll get my Atti back now.

He goes and rides to Atlantis.
Dartz: What do you want here?
Mahado: Are you Dartz?
Dartz: Yeah. May I ask who ...
Mahado: Where's my atti?
Dartz: What are you talking about?
Mahado: You know that very well.
Dartz: No, I don't know.
Mahado: Yes and bye.

He swings back and breaks Dartz's nose. Then Dartz passed out.Mahado goes to the room where Atemi is. He finds her by speaking very loudly.
He goes into the room.

Atemi: Mahado, my darling!

She runs to him and hugs him.

Atemi: How did you find me?
Mahado: Firstly, you said you wanted to be with me a long time ago, secondly, you wanted to go to Atlantis and thirdly, you were heard through this whole palace.
Atemi: Was I really that loud?
Mahado: Yes, you were and my feeling led me to you.

They make out and ride off.
After a few meters, Dartz will put you in front of the two of them.

Dartz: You don't think I'll let you go that easily, do you ?!
Mahado: Yes. Or do you want to pass out again? I give you the choice.
Dartz: No, I'd rather not. Then goes.

Mahado grins and both ride home, where Atemi treats himself to a bath first.

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My own review:
- a little too sappy
- I could have brought in more ideas