Of illogic & mirrors

Part 1.10.21
KITTY: Hello, welcome to our MSTing!
SHANTIH: I'm glad you're here.
KITTY: We just finished the preparations, so you're coming to the right place!
SHANTIH: Since we don't want to do the MSTing alone, we got a few guests.
KITTY: * the door to the cinema opens *
The authors step in and turn on the lights, whereupon four ninja can be seen who are tied to the cinema seats. With steel chains, of course. All four look angrily at the authors and fight against their bonds.
KITTY: Yeah, we're happy to see you guys too.
SASUKE: What are you going to do with us now?
ITACHI: We're supposed to be a FF MST, am I right ?!
SHANTIH: Japp ^ _ ^ * sit down next to Itachi *
SASUKE: Can't that even be done without that? * Look at Itachi with deadly eyes * Stop no, better without me!
SHANTIH: Nope. ^^. I found such an interesting FF.
SAKURA: But a very short one, yes?
KITTY: Uh ... 21 chapters.
NINJA: X_x
SHANTIH: You shouldn't have said that ...
KITTY: do you mean? ^^ ". Where is Kakashi anyway?
KAKASHI: Hm, me? * les *
SHANTIH: Hey! Here is MSTed and not read! * Takes the book away from him *
KAKASHI: Hey ...._.
Now that everyone is paying their full attention to the screen and Shantih has quickly moved the armchairs so that Itachi and Sasuke sit as far apart as possible and then sit next to Itachi and Kitty has inserted the DVD, it can start, the title of Badfic appears .
What is love? Can you tell me that? But you're just a murderer too
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SASUKE: There are no spelling mistakes in the title! O_O
SHANTIH: Don't get excited too soon.
What would you do if you stood between good and bad? If you couldn't say what your heart is telling you because you can't hear it? What would you do if you couldn't be close to the person who means most to you? Yuka Emiro is going through her happiest and worst time of her life at the same time. Will she manage to get through? ItachixYuka
ITACHI: Five commas are missing!
SAKURA: * groan * Not again!
SASUKE: Um, Itachi? Did you read that at the end? ^ _ ^
ITACHI: Huh? * read again * what the-
SHANTIH: * raises his mouth * Shh! ^^ "
KAKASHI: The sentences are formulated horribly!
SAKURA: And it hasn't even started! ._.
Chapter 1: "Yuka Emiro the black angel of Konohagakure"
ITACHI: A comma after "Emiro".
SAKURA: What kind of name is that anyway?
SASUKE: There aren't enough clans, no, you absolutely have to invent new ones. -_-
KAKASHI: Otherwise quite right! ^ _ ^
KITTY: Yeah. But that's just the chapter title.
Two years after the Kyuubi attacked Konoha village ...
Terrible flames glow ... A village is on fire ...
People are on fire ... and on top of a rock
watched a little girl with shocked eyes that happen, red eyes,they get bigger, bigger, and then they strike,
ITACHI: A comma after "years" and the commas after "rocks", "eyes" and "bigger" can be removed. After "happened" a point.
KAKASHI: "after" and "that" together, "a" and "happening" big.
SASUKE: How does that work? Your eyes just keep getting bigger and then slam? On what? That does not make sense.
[i]and back on, Konohagakure 12-13 years after the Kyuubi disaster. Yuka started up, bathed in sweat, she sat in her bed.
SASUKE: Oh! She closed her eyes!
SAKURA: for 12-13 years. oO
SHANTIH: No, no. After "up" there is actually a point and that has nothing to do with it.
ITACHI: There is no comma after "bathed". * take out *
SAKURA: You bathed in sweat? Disgusting!
KAKASHI: Rather, she wakes up "drenched in sweat".
[i]"That memory again." she said to herself. She went into the bathroom and took a shower.
ITACHI: A comma after a verbatim speech. * Insert comma *
[i]When she was finished and dressed, she looked in the fogging mirror. She knew exactly what she would see now:
SASUKE: Yeah, I know how I look too. -_-
ITACHI: And I know that after "had" and "exactly" there is a comma.
KAKASHI: And I know that "knew" is written with double s.
SAKURA: It's nice that you know so much, but I know that you can't see too much of yourself in a fogged-up mirror ^^ "
KITTY: A Mary Sue can do it!
[i]Her black, slightly curly hair, her fiery red eyes and her face: Where everyone says it looks like that of an angel. But she had vowed never to look in a mirror again.
KAKASHI: * shrug * "Where everyone said" ?! If so, "what everyone said about"!
SAKURA: Also your "schwazEN". And that saying must be written in the subjunctive.
ITACHI: Instead of the colon, a comma would be better, after "say" and "swore" also commas!
SASUKE: She swore she'd never look in a mirror again, didn't she?
ALL: * yes *
SASUKE: So what does she do now ?! Is she stupid ..
[i]That's the only thing she was afraid of, the look in a mirror. To see what she doesn't want to see, herself.
SASUKE: Gosh!
KAKASHI: "only one" great.
ITACHI: I want commas after "only" and "see"!
SASUKE: She's really stupid.
SAKURA: Well, but somehow she has to do her hair and so ...
[i]Sometimes people ask you: Can you still look yourself in the eye? She couldn't do that anymore, for so long and that's what made her so sad.
KITTY: Hey, the section has no errors ^ ___ ^
[i]She left the bathroom again and then her house. Today was the Chunin exam and that is exactly where her thoughts were. She has a very terrible feeling, but it was nothing, or was it? That feeling of what told her that something terrible was going to happen.
ITACHI: I want commas!KAKASHI: And I want it to be case sensitive!
SASUKE: And I don't know what she was doing in the bathroom now.
SHANTIH: Looked in the steamed-up mirror.
SASUKE: -_- women .. ts.
[i]She looked up at the faces of the Hokage. There was nothing, but the queasy feeling remained. Her gaze looked straight at the face of the fourth Hokage, then the third. She put on a smile wandered the streets of Konoha a little.
ITACHI: After "on" and ".
KAKASHI: I'm not improving this now! >. <
SASUKE: Your look was looking? Can one look then see?
SHANTIH: That means "her eyes" or something like that.
SAKURA: The apostrophe and the "s" in the fourth Hokage can be left out.
[i]There was still time before she should report to the Hokage
she tried to remember her Chunin exam but it didn't work. "Shit but it was ... ages ago."
ITACHI: What's wrong with the comma key?
KITTY: Well, maybe she's crazy ... ^^ '
SASUKE: You want to remember the exam? Has she done it before?
KAKASHI: Looks like it.
ITACHI: Isn't it every six months, or has that changed?
KAKASHI: Maybe she just didn't take part.
SHANTIH: Anyway.
[i]Again she looked up at the faces of the Hokage "Naruto Uzumaki you will make it one day you will be the new Hokage, but first you have to pass the Chunin exam today and to do this you have to defeat Neji Hyuga." she looked at her hands and lifted them up so that the sun wouldn't dazzle them.
NINJA: oO Such a big section!
ITACHI: So many comma errors ...
KAKASHI: So many misspellings ...
BOTH: * sigh *
REST: oO
SAKURA: Well luckily Naruto isn't there ...
SASUKE: But we have the chronological classification now!
[i]“But I believe in you, you will make it.” Everyone around her stared at her, but that didn't bother her, she didn't care much about the opinions and thoughts of people.
ITACHI: After "next" a point or a comma.
KAKASHI: "Value" great.
SAKURA: Perhaps there should be an "other" between "from" and "people". She is human too.
SASUKE: Or rather a Mary Sue.
[i]Besides, she was used to these puzzled looks for a long time. "Oh Hokage that's exactly what I should go to now."
ITACHI: After "Hokage" and "es" a comma.
KAKASHI: "used to" and you can save yourself the "go".
SASUKE: And the context is also a little strange ...
SAKURA: Didn't she say upstairs that she still had time before she had to go to the Hokage?
SASUKE: Yes, she did.
SAKURA: And why - * break off * * shake your head * It doesn't matter.
[i]She started running, all the people standing around looked after her. Yes, she was somehow a strange girl, Konoha's black angel ebbing.
SASUKE: Well, I knew she was weird.
ITACHI: But "Konoho's Black Angel"?Isn't that something ...
SHANTIH: ... Mary-Sue good? ^^
ITACH: Exactly.
KITTY: Well, let's take a break now, I think ...